Assignment 11

Question 1 :Whom is the composer including in the audience? Who is excluded from the audience-and why?

 The author used tones of scholar words which is too hard for normal people to understand. She excluded non-expert  audiences. Stein rather targeted experts, who may have ability to comprehend this text as well as have will to read this. 

Question 2 :Is there purpose clearly stated or easy to determine? If not, why might the composer have decided not to make the purpose obvious?

  For my analysis through this text, the purpose of the article is to clearly analyze the macintosh advertisement in terms of theoretical framework which she stated on her essay. But it's not clear enough to determine whether this is her purpose or not, because there's too many possiblities that can be interpreted as author's purpose. For instance, author writes an paragraph look as if it is a purpose of her text in the end of the conclusion section. At there I confused that her purpose of writing was to promote good-technology development like Macintosh.

Question 3:When is an audience likely to encounter the text? How might this shape their responses?

  The audience likely to encounter this text is the person who major on this subject or the expert who subscribe this scholarly journal, or english 101 students like me. Most of the reader is academically developed enough to discuss this kinds of complicated matter, so that the students who read this would say "What the hell is going on?", "It's too hard for me." . However, the targeted audiences like expert and writing-related subject major would say "Umm.. this sounds impressive. Let's discuss this at the conference."



These writerly choices combine each other and makes my interpretation knotty. I decided to interpret this as if I'm a expert rather than mere english 101 student who might read this article without knowing anything.   What's clear is that she wrote this to express her assertions related with 1984 Macintosh ad, as well as panicked many students who would likely to read this article.

[Group Work] Reflection

           I didn't have opportunity to join in the 'Group Work'. I was sick at that day so that I overslept and missed my time to arrived on the class on time.

       Working with others' ideas is hard because every people have their own personal background so that even with the same material, they approach through the different way.  To comprehend and compare them with my idea, I should catch up their context of interpreting the article, think of their choices, controlling purpose. However, other people's idea can help my essay to contain more object to interpret which is the author's writerly choice I didn't found out, also I can have a wider view analyzing the author's article.

      Even though I didn't participated on the activity, I was surprised on the one-pager of 'conclusion'. Their pictures and words clearly summarizes the features of the ad. Their question is, 'What is Stein's view?'. I think that Sarah agrees with the idea of which the 1984 Macintosh is talking about. Like the apple wanted to achieve was a transition in control of technology from totalitarian instrument oppression to liberate force which in other words personal computers, Stein criticized the technophobia at 'Ultimately, the message of the Macintosh ad is an old one echoing cultural faith in the machine and in technology-endangered progress. Technology per se does not yield the Big Brother figure and its control over brainwashed and robotized masses.'(299). When I saw this paragraph she also thinks that right technology-which can be interpreted as Macintosh in the commercial- should flourish to make advancement in the world.

   As I reading whole one-pagers, the question comes out in my head was 'DID SHE TALKED ABOUT COLDWAR??'. Actually, before reading the analysis one-pager, I've never knew about Stein talking about cold war.

tentative CP:  Author thinks that this advertisement is giving the world that their technophobia, which is a tendency of people having a fear on technological advancement. Stein says that the commercial tells us that Technology itself doesn’t have problems like Big Brother figure. The technology causes that kind of problem is wrong technology, and good technology will provide people a salvation. I’ve learned that even the simple 60-second-commercial can have a lot of meaning, method, and message. This was my first time to encounter analysis of advertisement. 

Assignment 10 Question & Summary

Question 1 What is Stein's intent of analyzing 'Running Woman' deeply?

Question 2 What is Stein's attitude towards the technological development?

Summary 

     The 1984 Macintosh Ad: Cinematic Icons and Constitutive Rhetoric in the Launch of a New Machine is the article analyzing the advertisement of Apple broadcasted at 1984. Stein describes the contexts of the advertisement telling readers what was going on in the advertisement at the section 'Description of the text'. The essay flows to the section 'Theoretical frameworks', the section which introduces Charland's Constitutive Rhetoric, Robert Goldman's commodity-as-sign, Walter Benjamin's notion of re-enchantment though commodity images, gives the theoretical background of author to analyze the ad. The history of Macintosh and apple’s intention to do those, situation, and their supporter’s marketing strategy at ‘The Rhetorical History of the Macintosh’. Also, the author describes the atmosphere and situation of that time on ‘The Rhetorical Context of the “1984” Ad’. She analyzed the certain objects in the commercial as well as its motif based on her former set-up in the analysis section. Then, she summarized those and conclude with mentioning the advertisement’s message at the conclusion section. 

     As everyone knows that Steve Jobs made a great success on  1970's and 1980's as well as the time since late1990's. Especially the time when the Sarah wrote this article, the early 2000s, he was making a lot of money with 'Macintosh'. Because the company Apple and its product Macintosh is in dominant position in the market, 1984 Macintosh ad might have allured author a lot. Not only that, because  the commercial is evaluated as the turning point in advertising, Stein may thought this as her research topic.
    I think she may wanted readers to understand her analysis about the commercial and agree to it. I can recognize her will when I was reading her conclusion section. At the conclusion, she interprets the ad's meaning as itself as well as the meaning of 'Running Women', and the message of the ad. It can be found on the sentences 'Freedom through revolution is the central theme of the ad, the power to revolt against tyranny and to act freely as an individual.'(298), 'The Running Women is successful at shattering the image of Big Brother in the "1984"ad,'(299), and 'Ultimately, the message of the Macintosh ad is an old one echoing cultural faith in the machine and in technology-endangered progress.'(299).

Assignment 9

    This was the first time that I have a group conference. I thought it little bizarre, because I thought the conference was the meeting with instructor to get a revision and advice on my essay drafts. The reason why I had this stereotype was that I took ESL 117 last semester, and they have few group revision and the conference hour was totally personal meeting with instructor. I went to the conference with 'no thinking' in my head. As I arrived at the place, I, frankly speaking, was frozen. Really! Because of pressure that people will read my essay and evaluate it, also, I also have to read their essays and make comments on them. To make matters worse, I was not confident with my essay at all, because I wrote in rush, so that I wonder if the essay has some ridiculous ideas, which can make others laugh. 
     The essay attracted my interest most was the Ryan's essay. He starts his essay with simple joke, 'Every year a portion of our pay check is deposited into the state and federal governments' checking accounts. It's called paying taxes. It's not called Taxidermy.'(1).  Ryan used the similarity of pronunciation between tax and taxidermy. Even though it is not quite related to the content, however, relieve readers from tediousness. Also he used his own word 'guardians of history' to effectively deliver the function of the taxidermy described in the article. 
    I've noticed that I have several ideas of mine linked with ideas in  David's essay. I found author describing the attitude of people making taxidermy in ' "I love deer." one of the champions in the whitetail division said to me.'(2) and 'The ultimate goal of a taxidermists is to make the animal look exactly as if it had never died'(4), and David found out the attitude of taxidermists in the word 'zoology nerd', which he defined it as 'passionate and obsessive nature of the taxidermist'(2,David). I felt David has same feeling with me when he firstly(may be) encountered the word 'taxidermy by this essay when I reading his second paragraph's first sentence, 'It seems Orlean is well aware that Taxidermy is a rare trade and many people to do not understand about the trade, and she consciously written every detail to make the essay interesting and informative to all audiences'(1,David). As he did, I was not used to the concept of taxidermy, and because the taxidermy is unfamiliar subject to common people, I thought the reason why Susan gives a lot of information about taxidermy was to relieve that. David's approach is exactly same with me! This idea can be found on 'As I looked thorough the essay, this is the piece which introduces a lot about taxidermy.'(2, Seungmin) and 'I think the author wants readers to know more about taxidermy, not just treat them as the thing which feels weird, but the piece of art created by a lot of people's passions to make 'LifeLike' features'(2, Seungmin). 
    I think finding out the similar points and the other's bright ideas will make my writing better and better. This adds up to my sources to write, give a wider view through the article. Finding out the idea of other person which is similar with mine also helps me a lot because it gives me the feeling that my idea is great!, so that I can have confidence on my work.

Reflecting on Revision

  My partner dropped the class. When I worked with him I returned his essay to him so I don't have any piece of work to discuss

Assignment 8

 



     I was impressed that each person has various view towards same article. As I looked through other students' assignment about the article 'LifeLike', I've got the writerly choices that I didn't knew, also I can face their distinctive interpretation on same writerly choices. What I found out about the writerly choices of Susan Orlean, was focused on the good side of it. However, the one I read while commenting to other points out that her quotation distracts concentrating on the contents of the text. That was really fresh view for me. I think that he could widen his approach to the negative effects of the writerly choices the author made because he thought flexibly. For commenting on my assignments by myself, it has similar feeling when I was reading and commenting to others' assignments. It made me to read my writing objectively. I could find the positive sides of my essay like fresh expressions as well as the thing should be reinforced.  I should read the article more flexibly and view it at the multiple perspective next time. So that I'm gonna write my essay not stuck in limited view point, but consider a various aspects as well.
   The audience of my essay might be unfamiliar to the article I'm talking about, so it is necessary to stating the context of the article and the reason of my thoughts. I will express my thought in a descriptive tone cause I'm interpreting this article and author's choices to the strangers who might don't know about the 'LifeLike'. I think my essay can be differentiated from others by expressions, the choice of author's writerly choices, and the feeling and thoughts about each writerly choices.

Assignment 7

     Q1. Why do we think it is more reliable when quoting an actual people's saying in an article?
        What I think is that by hearing the people who worked for and closely related to taxidermy, we can think that this information is based on people who actually make taxidermies. This fact is important because the experts' word is really trusted by people in many ways. We usually quote experts' saying to obtain ethos, the credibility. I believe that Orlean wanted to get the same effect as when we are quoting the saying of experts when we writing an essay.



    Q2.  How can using a number in explaining the size of taxidermy industry can boost interest of the readers? Is there another effect of it rather than boost the interest of readers?
         For me, number is a great indicator that helps me to assume how the thing is look like, how big it is. The context of using number was when she was explaining about the size of taxidermy industry, describe the taxidermy industry by using number gives credibility, not only that, it helps reader to assume the how big it is more easily and make them to have more interest on it , so this is the perfect choice for Susan to use number when she explains about taxidermy industry.  Not only for me, but for most of people, money is the thing attracts attention. I think author catches this mere fact and applied it on her article.

Assignment6: choices

        I could find Susan using the word 'zoology nerd' when she explains about what is needed to become a taxidermist. It is not a formal word, but she used it to tell "To make a good taxidermy, It is essential to have a lot of zoological knowledge." It's kind of weird because her form of writing is an article, and article normally uses more formal language, but the word she used is an informal word. Why did she made this kind of 'inappropriate word choice'? What I think of it is that, she wanted to express the same meaning as 'To be a taxidermist, we need a lot of interest and knowledge toward zoology' in a more friendly and concise way by compressing those words into two words, 'zoology nerd'. I felt much more comfortable to know what we need to become a taxidermist.
       I also found that author quoting people's actual saying when she explains about taxidermists. By using Taxidermists own saying, found in 'One of the champions in the whitetail division said to me."They're my babies."(page2)' I think that this makes author's message more lively and also makes readers to trust the informations mentioned in the article, which in other words, gives the ethos to the article. We can believe the informations given in the article more easily because it is which taxidermists said.
       I found author using numbers to boosts the attention of the readers in 'Taxidermy is now estimated to be a five-hundred-and-seventy-milion-dollar annual business,(page2)', which makes reader more interested in taxidermy by using money in explaining the size of taxidermy industry.

    And also she mentions a lot of informations through out the article. Susan talked about the history of taxidermy, taxidermists' gathering, their events where she went, specific representative artworks of taxidermies like Walker's Panda. It leads me to have more interest in taxidermy and help comprehending the works of people who make taxidermy. The one that made me interest most was example of Panda, making taxidermy of endangered animal. Making a vivid record of an endangered animal without killing them attracts me to see the positive side of taxidermy. Like this example, providing a lot of information about the topic which can be summarized as an overview of topic can lead to better understanding and interest of readers.

Assignment6

        The article has a tone of 'Journalistic figure'.  I noticed it when I was reading author's quotations of actual taxidermists which can be found on phrases like  'One of the champions in the whitetail division said to me."They are my babies."(page2)'. This kind of interview makes reader to trust the article more. Which is in other words, gives article a ethos. Every time author delivers the attitudes taxidermists have and telling which kinds of people taxidermists actually are. By hearing the saying of people working on those fields, It was easy for me to comprehend their passion, their hardships, etc.
         Not only that, she tries to informs the reader a lot about taxidermy, which is not familiar to many of us, by introducing the overview of it. Susan Orlean tells us about the history of taxidermy, their events, as well as its representative pieces of work.The one example I found is 'Taxidermy, the three dimensional representation of animals for permanent display, has been around since the eighteenth century(page1)', I didn't know even a minimal part of taxidermy before reading this part, however, I got to know the concept and able to infer its origin by reading this part and become interested to know more about taxidermy, which led me to dip into this article throughly. Like this this kinds of basic informations about the topic makes it easier for the readers to have more interest about the thing article is talking about. This is the typical style of an article explaining and introducing about some interesting topic. I can also say this article as 'A promotion material of Taxidermy' because it boosts reader's interest towards taxidermy and improves taxidermy's image as well as informs a lot about it. Susan wants readers to have positive image about the taxidermy, make them understand the attitudes of people who makes taxidermies,.
       I think the her intention to wrote this in the form of an article instead of other forms like personal travel sketch was to make the writing more reliable and trustworthy. If she delivers same informations about taxidermy with other more personal forms, it may have some friendliness, but loses the credibility instead. The form of an article enables the writers to use interviews they made, make people not to have doubt about the information which are mentioned in the article.
     
       

Assignment5

   I think the author wrote this as her travel essay about the time when she went to 2003 World Taxidermy Championships. Orlean starts with describing what she saw there, like dozens of taxidermies , taxidermy equipments. Author continues writing about taxidermy's history. People starts to make taxidermy about 18c, by 1882 Society of American Taxidermists established, annual meeting  and scholarly reports were created and by many people think it's black arts, it temporarily daunted its strength, however about late 1960s its business started to seem more acceptable to people, and again the National Taxidermy Association formed, and many magazines treating taxidermy created. Susan keep telling about taxidermy skills, the factors needed to become a taxidermists, their attitude towards their works, and she introduce regional and global championship of it and websites about taxidermy. Not only that she explained about contenders of the contest, Walker's Panda- made by sewing two black bears.
   As I looked through the essay, this is the piece which introduces a lot about taxidermy. She may start writing the essay to show her experience, however , because it is so precise and contain a lot of informations about taxidermy, It seems like promotion material of taxidermy. I think author wants readers to know more about taxidermy, not just treat them as the thing which feels weird, but the piece of art created by a lot of people's passions to make 'LifeLike' features. I got to feel that as Orlean keep telling about taxidermist's attitude toward their objects. I could feel their seriousness, I got to know their effort to make more realistic figure of nature.

   I had bias about taxidermy before encountering this article. I thought they are weird, and they are only  a bad hobby of cruel poachers. However, I got to know the different aspects of taxidermy, which is not a toy of illegal hunters, but the piece of artwork created by many ardent people who are eager to accomplish one of their life goal, making the most 'LifeLike' objects. I think making the figures of pandas and other extinct or endangered animal is such a cool thing. By this fact, I'm started thinking about taxidermy's potential as keeping earth's history vividly. I think this is similar with author had expected readers to think about the taxidermy after reading the essay because I think unlike her former purpose was to describe her experience and information she got in the World Taxidermy Championship, she got to express her feelings about the attitude of taxidermists and interests in many attractive artifacts of taxidermy.

standing by CP

   People react differently to the people by their surroundings, and at everyday life, people normally have few amount of interest to others. Author resolved this situation by selecting airport, to bring about our attention towards others. He wanted the readers to think about each other and feel their lives, situations, and behaviors. Living in the 21C, which era that is deficient in caring about others, author delivers a message to sharing life with others.

My weekend

   pork belly party

wathching superbowl through TV

Listening to music with my brand new Philips speaker

assignment 4: Choices

      Sedaris chose the airport as his stage of writing. Normally, at airport, the thing people normally do is just waiting for the flight. Most of them should kill their time until they got a plane to their destinations. Naturally, they are easy to focus on other people's behaviors, features, and situations. It perfectly fits into Authors perspective through ourselves. He wants people to look more about each other. I think that this choice of the place makes audiences more easier to sympathized with the situations and understanding each people in the essay. This choice and the practical value of this writing seriously relates because its purpose is to look around ourselves.








I can't really understand what the question meaning.....

Assignment 4

   I frankly think that  the things that Sedaris and his reaers mostly interested about can be anything that is around us. In his essay, he mostly depicts people's episodes, clothing, hair, and sayings and even their political views toward country.

   He wrote this writing after the Barak Obama become the 44th president of the United States. That was the first time ever that the African-American became a president of the United States. This 'Time Match' is really important because it might influence the authors attitude a lot. Winning in presidential election of ethnic minorities means a lot of things. It states that the country become more open to every members of the society. In other words, It means that we should acknowledge the features of ourselves and respect each others also. Sedaris did it greatly. He approve the opinions that he barely not think as so. He listened to them and just think on the other way. He carefully watches other people's scene in the airport. Related with this time match, we can clearly define the author's view point.

He saws the world as it is, not adjusting things into his stereotype. He avoids to hate things, complaining about it, he just likes to contemplate them. Like describing the appearances of people, the author just want to recite and think about people he saw. Unlike his taste, he also listens to the people who have different political views. It can be seen on the situation that the man with khaki shorts and man with mustache expressing their own political view to Sedaris.

Assignment 3

      I think that Sedaris wrote this Essay mostly because he wanted to show readers his experiences in the airports. He wanted to give peoples' appearance, living, by showing his situations that he encountered at the airport. He show the saying and behavior of the Woman in 70s with her grandkids, and he described the dressing of those grandkids briefly. He also looked the family consist of 5,  with couple in 50s and three teenagers. He saw people who are complaining about their lives under rule of Barak Obama, blaming his government as communist.

   The author thinks a lot about the true beings of us, which can be shown on "But what if this is who we truly are, and the airports's just a forum that allows us to be our real selves, not just hateful but gloriously so?(277)". He saw each forms of different individual beings in the airport. Grandmother sending her grandkids to san francisco, the boy with orange hair, the man with khaki shorts, the man with mustache are all the feature of ourselves. Author effectively dissolves his thought into his episode in the airport delay time.

  I think that he wanted readers to think one more about what we truly are. Whether or not it is a simple, unimportant thing, the existence itself has its own value. He wanted to inform and review our figure through this essay.





Question1. Why did Sedaris thinks that knowing what we truly are is important?

Question2. Is it righteous to blame things only based on my situation like the man wearing khaki shorts and the man with mustache?

Standing By

This essay is about writer's experiences during the waiting time in the airport. David Sedaris, the writer of this article, takes plane often because of his occupation, when he went to airport he saw many people having inconvenience. At spring on 2003, he was asked to prey for troops in Iraq. At summer of 2009, he was taking plane from Dakota to Oregon, But there was thunderstorm in colorado, so there was 2hour-delay on the departure at Fargo, he missed the connecting flight. When he arrived at Denver, he has directed to the customer-service line. It was very long and many people looked exhausted there. He firstly saw a woman in 70s with well-dressed boy and girl. She complained about airline that they always say they worry because of few people traveling, but because they oversold the ticket, she had to wait to send her grandkids to San francisco with being told nothing from airline until tomorrow. Suddenly, her phone rang and she tried to find thing to write, the author lend his pen&pad to woman. As David looked around he saw a family consists of couple in the 50s and 3teenagers which is two of them are boys and the other one is girl. The girl was holding very young baby. And she also saw grand-mother and she asked him about which person the author vote for. After that Sedaris suddenly fell a sleep. When he got up, he saw a man. He started to complain without asking anything. He said the woman at the gate said she called his name but she did not.
Suddenly there were announcement through P.A. system asked Adulf Hitler to find his luggage, and the man wearing khaki shorts and the mustache started complaining about their life under Barak Obama, who have been his office for only six months at that time. Author keeps saying he don't know how to hate, but that not he truely want to say.



WORKS CITED
"Standing By: Fear, Loathing, Flying" by David Sedaris, reprinted from the New York, recollected from the First year composition book 2011-2013 page 275-277

Assignment 2

         I previously thought this class as writing-only class because I heard that different with my previous class, ESL 117-which covers grammar and writing, 101 focuses only on reading material and writing based on it. But this was totally different one. I should make conversations with my class members and also check their errors in essays.

         I expect two major things for this class. I want to be a good college-level writer by having  many writing chances through this course and by the in-class activities, become more fluent in english speaking as well. I hope that classmates and Ms.Evans gives me concise review about my assignment or essays and encourage to speak more so that I can settle in the "English" and "America" more easily and stably.

         I have a concerns about some parts in the student guide and syllabus. Firstly, at the participation part in the first page of the syllabus, I wonder whether I can actively participate on constructive criticism because my shortest part at English is speaking especially resulted by my shy personality. Secondly, on the evaluation part in page 5 on the class description, It states that instructor will not correct spelling, punctuation, and sentence structure because it is my responsibility. This is a concern for me because I think I need a lot of checkings and advices to become skilled writer&speaker.

      I think that writing several essays here could be the positive experience whatever the career I walk through. No matter which job I get, writing a paper or expressing my thought is inevitable thing. Through Outlining and writing and fixing the essay, I think I can acquire better understanding to myself and ability to develop my career.  I wrote like I love to write, but actually I don't like writing that much till now. However, I think I can feel comfortable and like writing the essays when I finish this course.

Introduction about me

My name is Seungmin. I'm from Gwangju, which is located at the south-western part of Korea. My family is consist of five members, mom, dad, 2 younger sisters one is . I enjoy listening to music and surf the internet when I have spare time. For my wish to myself is that I want to have confidence when I do things even if it is challenging. I'm satisfied with Milwaukee's collaboration of artificial structures and nature. Milwaukee is a big city that has many large, and big buildings and most of the houses are surrounded by trees unlike my home town, gwangju. The Michigan lake- I heard it is one of the largest fresh water lake in the world- is really beautiful and also very big, that I can easily confused it as sea. Beaches near the lake gives me unusual experience because I never show a beach located near lake so I never expected about fresh water beach. My field of study is Information Studies. Because I just transferred my major from economics to IST, I don't know much about this major but I heard it is related to managing information. I chose this major because I was not sure about my major and IST major allows me to try wide range of subjects because it does not require a lot of major courses. My best class was bowling and chemistry. It was because bowling has comparatively low barrier to play it and I can ease my stress by rolling the ball to the pin and also chemistry was really interested because knowing about substances which composes things around us was really exciting thing. During my high school year, my writing was usually focused on entering universities. I wrote the essay based on given paragraph. Naturally, I was far from enjoy writing. I like to read newspaper, especially about interesting phenomena relating to nature and human society. I read books related to human's conscious and books related to economics and some science book that raise my curiosity towards science.  Know, my thoughts towards writing has totally changed. After graduating the high school I started to think writing as the most effective tool to express my thought thoroughly and accurately. For me, writing is effective medium that connects me with the world by enable me to spread my idea into the world. By biggest concern about college-level writing is that cause I am not native speaker on english, I'm not sure about the usage of words and grammar, structure of context. I need comfortable environment to discuss and ask questions about my concerns related to this kind of issues and also I want to improve my english fluency through group projects and writing essays. I hope I can speak and write english as fluent as ordinary Americans who are eligible to finish college education appropriately. To notify to my classmates, I'm really want to be friends with you guys but I'm really shy, so I hope you guys to approach to me first and become friends with each other.